Okay, so as far as the WRITING of this goes, I'm about 40% done now. Not a HUGE increase, but I've been doing a lot of editing and additional work to the chapters I already have. Originally, I was playing around with this idea of a 3rd person perspective where the narration changes, depending on who is present. Meaning, if Bishamon is in the scene, then the narration is semi-omniscient. If it's Hitori and the usual party, then it would be more normal and unaware. It sounded like a neat idea, but in practice I felt it was too confusing and I couldn't think of a solid way to transition from one to the other without stating outright that I was doing this.
I want the book to flow, so the reader gets so lost in the story that they forget how it's written and hits their brain like a dream. Those are my favorite kind of stories. That's why I don't overly describe anything that a normal human being should already know. If you don't know what a park looks like, go outside. I also don't overly describe the characters. I'll give you hair color, clothing and any unique feature.
Dixie is a tall woman with shoulder length curly, dark hair and purple bangs. The rest: her skin color, lip size, ears, mouth, etc...I leave that up to the reader. To me, none of that stuff matters to the character. Dixie having pouty lips and tiny ears doesn't make her less of a goofball, but the purple bangs do mean something. It's an indicator, one of those first impression visuals we see everyday that sheds a light on her personality.
I like stories that engage me, that guide me down a path, but don't instruct me every step of the way. I know this isn't everyone's cup of tea, but I'm betting the people who are big in to action, chaos and humor are more like me than not. In case you're wondering, I'm not directing this at anyone, but this sort of thing has been brought up a couple times now and I thought I should respond.